They say young love will never last
And only now do I know why
He left me here broken, bleeding
Without so much as a goodbye
Inside this hollow shell I live
I hear the world lie to my heart
Telling me that time heals all wounds
That it gets better once we start
These empty places steal my mind
I know neither the day or hour
Since he left nothing else matters
And my time left the clocks devour
The pendulum still advances
Mercilessly it drags me on
I want to stop there's no point now
And now I know he's really gone
These empty tears I cry are vain
I know they won't bring him back
But I can't keep them from coming
And so my days have all turned black
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- misery loves company... by nobodys-girl.
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Comments
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This is sad that you feel this way at such a young age. No one should ever determine your value to yourself or the world. Allow yourself to feel the pain but then get up, dust yourself off and move on... otherwise you will be stuck in this pain forever, and that is never a place someone wants to be.
Your poem is very well written!!
Criss
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wow...its so dark and amazing at the same time. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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Oh, i like this poem a lot. it is very nice. if i might say some advce.. on the first stanza last line, i think you shuld put, without so much as to say goodbye. it needed another syllable.. you can take it or leave it. just being a critique
but anywho, one of my favs. next to the twilight one.
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