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All I Am

All I Am,
Is Your servent.
All I Am,
Is bloodless veins.
All I Am,
Is nobody.
All I Am,
Is hope lost in a void of uncertainty.
All I Am,
Is me.

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A contest entry

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  • JinSays gold member
    December 7, 2008
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    unsertainty
    uncertainty.

    Is bloodless veins.
    change your is to are.

    I really love this starkly painful poem.
    I want to to fix the errors aboe andget back to me so I can award it something. Okay?
    I think you've done a marvelous job with this prompt, and I wish you all the best.
    Love,
    jin


  • queen Moderators member
    November 25, 2008

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    welcome to all poetry

    I have felt this way many times i hope you find all the happiness life has to offer good poem
    please keep writing, reading and commenting
    Barbara
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  • Dont Lose THE ONE
    November 23, 2008

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    I thought this poem was extremley good with a lot of emotion. Short and sweet and I enjoyed reading it! The only thing that I might suggest is having a new background so that It is easier to read. =]
    I hope I get a chance to read more... You did a great job in this one <3
    Taya