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callous.

because of you,
I grew numb and blind.

unfeeling,
I rushed blindly about
bumping into walls.

it was cruel,
but then again,
your eyes were always unforgiving.

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  • letters to no one
    January 9

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    This really ties with the word "callous"

    His eyes were callous, unrelenting, and you were drawn into them.

    Sometimes I think eyes are the most disgusting part of human anatomy, but only when they are so mesmerizing or deceitful.

    Wow, sorry, self-centered rant :/

    Love it
    Shelly
    xxx
    ♥


  • The Fun House silver member
    December 14, 2008

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    Alot of emotion in this one. I like the format and tone of the piece. The last lines sums it up very well. Good job here.


  • aanika
    November 25, 2008

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    love the last line.
    short poems are hard to comment
    I LOVE YOU