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FLAMES OF FIRE(Octelle)

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Hissing, spitting, licking the trees

Dancing like devils in the breeze

Seething, writhing, burning hot

Drunk with power, caring not

Flames of mindless torment they

Eating up what’s in their way

Hissing, spitting, licking the trees

Dancing like devils in the breeze.

Author notes

Prompt/Fire
Octelle form of poetry.
The Octelle, created by Emily Romano, is a poem consisting of eight lines using personification and symbolism
in a telling manner. The syllable count structure for this verse is 8, 8, 7, 7, 7, 7, 8, 8, and the rhyme scheme is
aa/bb/cc/aa. The first two lines and the last two lines are identical.

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  • Dobar Dan
    April 21
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    Hello Pam

  • Dobar Dan
    March 2

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    Hey Pam - This Is Primo

    It so nice to here real poetry - rhymimg - dancing - spitting - you on fire Pam - Can't think of a thing I would change - You are the best - Joe - --------------------------------------------------------------------- hugsssss ---- BTW - if this is acontest poem it should take the GOLD hands down,


  • Rovingone gold member
    February 14

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    Ah, excellent and so full of description. You just make the fire come to life. It's like watching a little snippet of sound and color explode on the page.


  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    December 27, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry

    Well done on this one. I really enjoyed it. I felt that you really personified the flames of the fire.

    Excellent job on the form. They syllable count and rhyme scheme were right on and had a good flow. Well developed rhyme scheme as well.

    I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

    God Bless
    Tammy


  • Swan song gold member
    December 13, 2008
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    This is an excellent poem done in a stunning way!!!!


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    December 12, 2008

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    Outstanding Work, Poet!!


  • Ellis gold member
    December 8, 2008
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    Excellent

    I can not compare to what Amera has to say (below).


  • just mercedes gold member
    December 1, 2008

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    Great poem - form, flow, rhyme and rhythm all spot on, and the imagery is strong. Good luck in the contest.


  • Amera gold member
    November 28, 2008

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    I really love this! This is a form I have never tried and you composed it beautifully. (Yes I did count your syllables) I found the read to be fast; bam, bam, bam, just like the fire in the image. I can’t imagine a poem in this form being composed better.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Patpowers silver member
    November 28, 2008
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    Way to go Pam. Your poetry is on fire with this work of yours. THANKS again!!!


  • Capt Jed silver member
    November 25, 2008

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    This is HOT!

    I don't think I have ever heard a fire described the way you just did. This is wonderful, and very indicative of the wild fires we've had in this country lately. I liked the rhyme and the vivid description of fires' personality. Good luck in the contest.
    Caresses,
    Ron


  • Nicada silver member
    November 25, 2008

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    Wow! What amazing imagery you have used here in this poem! The form and flow is wonderful, and I enjoyed the read very much. Great write! Blessings, Patty


  • ScottishPrincess silver member
    November 24, 2008

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    Yet again other masterpiece you have here!
    Great rhyme and outstanding flow
    Just awesome,Regards,Hazel


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    November 24, 2008

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    WELL DONE

    Very impressed
    with your message within the rhyme
    and a great rhyme it is
    oh so very well done
    God bless you my friend...

    • Life is a Beach gold member
      November 24, 2008
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      Thank you so much! You are a precious soul and I appreciate you my friend. Pam

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