Twilight season revolving
in slow motion view
taunts wellsprings which
once whispered
All is not hush still
It is possible to wade through fiction
heart's inclination tells
Yet anemic scenery
may only bleed so much red
Author notes
Prompt::
"dead visions in your name
dead fingers in my veins"
- Slipknot [Dead Memories]
A contest entry
- Prompt Inspired - Under 50 Words by Exodus.
700 points, ended November 26, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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First line of the third stanza is amazing, I'm not so sure about the second. It seems like it's missing something. But of course I can't be of any help and tell you what it is.
Last stanza is the epitome of wow though
Thank you -
Intriguing take on the lines ... The passion of the song itself stings from your own words. It is hope that pushes the shell forward, and faith which leaves it there still trembling. Nice write!
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It's the strength of one's heart that makes life possible to continue despite the pain C
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