On Archer avenue at Lock street–
bus filled with polish
cleaning ladies, and mexican
kitchen staff, from the
expensive italian restaurant
downtown.
Each group speaking their
native tongues in the diverse,
dry atmosphere.
I picked up an odd asian girl
in a tight business skirt.
She boarded my bus with
city girl eyes, and some
sense of admiration.
I remember lusting after
her flexed calves; the kind
of calves you only see on
asian women,
or shapely
white girls who secretly
fuck black men.
She paid her fare and made
small talk, told me I looked
young for a bus driver.
“Are you puerto rican?”
I pretended not to be bothered
by that question; I know that
my bi racial hair, grown long,
and braided into a pony tail,
confuses people.
She told me I was handsome,
I blushed—
accelerator foot heavy from excitement.
She rode until the end of the line,
and while everyone else rushed
to catch their connection, she stayed.
I figured she was a china town whore,
but I played dumb, waiting;
watching her walk clumsily
down the aisle of the bus like
a stiff, bouncing dick.
Feeling sorry, I offered her some
words of advice, and a few Bible
scriptures—
and would you believe it,
turns out she was the
quality control inspector.
Author notes
Name: Afroqban
Prompt: 4. Retell a tale of something funny that happened in your past, that wasn't funny at the time, but now, it is freaking hilarious.
A contest entry
- Crazy Random Happinstance by peregrin.
1000 points, ended December 7, 2008, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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OMFG! this is a ride i happen to like poetry that actually is worth my time and my eyes i so love this its adventrous to many people can't even hold my muse like this i am intrested to read more hon good luck in the contest I actually sat up lol
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hey there, thanks for checkin it out, im glad u liked it, it was fun to write. much love
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That was Crazy!!
I really like that one! You had me in stitches. Great write as usual. Oh yeah, never judge a book by its cover.. :-)
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i never will again lol. ok let me get back to work. thanks for taken a look
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Great
You end your poems awesome. I usually don't get into free verse but this was well written. The ending was hilarious and very unexpected I liked it! -
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thank u...true story too lol
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never saw the end coming ... and once again, i love the real life that you portray in your writings and how you open yourself up to the ink ...
good luck in the contest ...
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HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA awesome new favorite.
worked in the city delivering beer to pay my way through school some of the things I saw still blow my mind. Hookers are just a small fragment of that.that's just hilarious.
Really love how you wrote it. Convayed the story so perfectly. I felt like i was there. wish could say more but its late. Thanks you.
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hey nuff said, made my night. thanks for reading. much love
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murphy's law
a thoroughly fun read - you are
a VERY good storyteller. It is
an honor, of sorts, around my
neck of the woods to be known
as a fine storyteller, so take it
as a high compliment
Love, Lane
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and so i shall...thank u Lane!
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lol haha
I love the way this is written, it is so powerful.
I reread it, and it just gets better, like reading a book over and over, and catching new things each time.
Thank you for entering.
Gwen
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thanks very much, it was fun to write.
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lol no worries
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ohh the details
She told me I was handsome,
I blushed—
accelerator foot heavy from excitement.
beautiful! it is hilarious.
i felt like i was on that bus too.
nice nice write.
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lol thanks, im glad u liked it. never thought i would telling this story, happen about 6 years ago.
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Very cool.
Best of luck!
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thanks for that. much love
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No problem
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