stuck between the two
not knowning what to do
do i pick him
or do i pick you
everything is a mess
nothing seems right
my decisions havent been very bright
im forced into a spot
that i need to be freed from
questions pour out
from deep within
is what im doing right for me
the furture is too far to see
nothing but comotion
is going on inside my head
memories toy with my emotion
making me feel empty and dead
choosing between one or the other
is a true indevior
it is something to handle with care
do i choose the one i love
or the love of another
or forget about both if i dare
time replays
memories never fade
words go in one ear
and out the other
frustrated and lost
my blood boils over
you just dont understand
what i am going through
you make everything about him
and feel sorry for yourself
so that i'll come back to you
and love you, hold you when you want
neither of you
know what you do
or how you both break my heart
a secret so safe
i keep in me
my one regret
is when i cry myself to sleep
i cry for what ive done
i cry for what i dont have
i cry over the decison that i have to make
and what the out come may take
part of me says no
my mind side says go
my friends give advice
my heart thinks twice
no matter the choice
it wont be good for the other
and i will always probably wonder
what if i choose the other?
maybe i could have been happier
only time will tell
and broken hearts will have to heal
god give me the strength
to do what needs to be done
help me choose the right one
Author notes
option 2
A contest entry
- "Why not tell us what you are thinking" - Winklings #146 by Lyndon.
1750 points, ended November 24, 2008, 14 entries
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comments please.
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I've had tough choices too. Stuff like whether or not to get up on saturdays. Lol jk. I have had to choose stuff like that though. Maybe not as serious but they tor me apart anyways cause no matter what someone gets hurt.
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To start thanks for entering, and right off the bat i liked this piece because i can relate, i am not the one with the choice, i was on of the choices lol, but this was right on the money for me it was long but i didnt want to stop the flow was nice. The only bad thing i could say was there was some repetition that could of been removed which would of shortened the piece but over all very well done this was a real piece to me again on the money i saw the the person i knew go throught those exact motions well done and good luck
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Poems about confusion are always intriguing to read. However, not only did I find the rhyming a hinderance to what you were trying to say, but overall this seemed repetitive and simplified to me. -
A bit dark!
Interesting and a bit different! Good luck in the contest!
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if only it wasn't three times the line limit!!
this poem is beautiful. no doubt about it. it may well have won if i changed the rules but i cant do that now cos iv already turned others away
anyway, i dont no how to analyse this. i just love it! It's a cry for help, a cry of frustration and worry. i know im repeating myself but i just love it!!
sorry you couldn't enter! Keep writing!
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LOL
i know right? after i posted it i was like whoa...that is a lot of lines haha. thanks for the comment though. im glad u liked it.
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