Her heart a Silenced bell
a ringing noise – that does not swell
a hand upon her silent bell
bell-keeper – silent holy ice
muted toll within her chest
cover lost within her tiers
silent strokes at
misty hours
bronzen cracks
hollowed out
cover lost
upon the approach of strong barrage
lay siege down to her castle walls
bring down her strong defenses
with bows and arrows of
gold
yet the bell
it does not toll twice
in your conceded honor
a muffled once – your prize.
A sleeper sighs
within her heart -
a moaning song -
for sweet goodbyes
Author notes
Um... this one seems off to me, I guess I just went too all out with the metaphor and I don't really like direct metaphors like this where you come out and just say it.
Bleh. I haven't written in a while, so i'm out of it.
Be honest here.
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great work thanks for sharing
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great rhyme and metaphor in my opinion
if anything i was a little bothered
by the repetitive use of the word "bell"
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Whoa kind of reminds me of a book I am reading, just some of the metaphors you used to describe in the write, the book is A Great and Terrible Beauty by Libba Bray. It's not the usually book I read but it is good and it reminded me of this write.
I don't think its bad, and even if you havent written in awhile, it is still good and worth posting it on AllPoetry. I especially liked how you ended this, kind of had a haunted vibe to it that I liked.
Anyways good write. I know you haven't written in awhile because your on my favorites
It is about time.
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I can see where your going with this The heart is the bell and silent it tolls Great metaphor.
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