Silken touches of
gentle fingers
traced contours,
nibbling on delicate parts..
Soft lips kissed
with passion
Opening eyes
to my Adonis
Sharing the sweet
morning kiss
We sinked into
each other's scents..
And he whispered,
"You have no idea how it feels..
to wake up every morning..
Knowing you are mine and I am yours..."
Lightly caressing my cheeks, he said,
".......Now let's get you in the shower sexy"
Author notes
Prompt: Morning songs
20 Lines
4) Erotica- For this one, I don't want RHYMING, more as a story. Make it as passionate as you want but it must be passion mixed with love... otherwise I won't take a second glance at it.
A contest entry
- morning songs by Nicolette.
1400 points, ended December 6, 2008, 22 entries
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Comments
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loved this Alyzeh! so beautifully written. sensuality in its finest form!!!
becca
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excellent
Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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i thought the first 3/4's of this piece were a bit adjective heavy, but i couldn't disallow the sweetness or sincerity, or the universiality of the piece.
thank you for sharing this with us
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One definately can't read this without wishing for a shower too
. A very sensual poem, but softly so, and with a heart-warming feeling of love and playfulness about it.
I also liked the nibbling part in the first stanza! This one left me with a big smile on my face - yep, this is how one should embrace the new day! Thank you for this entry.
~ Nicolette
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Silken touches of
gentle fingers << beautifully worded, really was gorgeous to read
nice last lines too
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This was beautifully written, goo luck in the contest, although I don't think you need any
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I'm not sure one cannot smile at this without a blush. Excellent! ~Pamela
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We sinked into
each other's scents..
And he whispered,
"You have no idea how it feels..
to wake up every morning..
Knowing you are mine and I am yours..."
Let's go with sunk, or absorbed or fell or climbed.
not sinked love.
This is a lovely little piece and it made me smile. I remember mornings like this, when I was uyounger.
I wish you the best in this contest, my darling girl,
and I love you always,
jin
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This was soft and sensual! I loved it!
Well done and good luck in the contest love.
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Hot, delicate and sexy. This one really stirs the senses. I wish that there was more of it. Increadible peom. Way to go. Good luck in the contest.
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Very sweet and sensual. This is a fine love poem with a true to life ending. Well written.
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This is a very sensual write Alyzeh
and very vivid asell
Much enjoyed
All the best to you in the contest
Ken
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Endearing...
...and cute in the same breath! Had a smile from ear to ear. It's pleasant to stumble upon poetry that isn't so heavy yet still manages to get the point across! Good luck in the contest
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