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Twisted dreams of the unknown

As I float on uneven clouds of consciousness, I can't help but wonder where have been lead

I wait in vain for a rushing spirit to knock me down and end this dread

a million images flash before my eyes and cause my thoughts to break

these sensations make my skin crawl, it seems I can only pray that I soon will wake

these sky-lit stairs are as twisted as this ever fading dream

locked away in this broken-down building with rain fogged windows, my throat is filled with a soundless scream

I can feel this presence start to race up to the mysterious second floor

but a can't bare to go, so I back up against the wooden door

now I can feel the dreadful presence creeping up behind me, so I rush over and step upon these skylight stairs and then I pause and start to move slow

the hair on the back of my neck stands up, and like an electric pulse that makes body tremble deep into it's core like icy cold wind against my skin that makes my breath like a fog rising from within me show



what should await me? I wonder as I reach the last step, will it mean that this dream will finally meet it's end?

 

I can only hope but still ponder what it all meant



though my own mind has caused this insanity,confusion and distress, myself I choose not to resent.

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  • Nicada silver member
    December 18, 2008
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    I see I have already commented on this poem. Please correct spelling errors. You have used some nice imagery here. Thanks much for entering. Blessings, Patty

  • Nicada silver member
    November 30, 2008

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    This poem has a very spookie feel to it and keeps the reader in suspense. Great job relating to the prompt and thanks much for entering. Blessing,Patty


  • JinSays gold member
    November 27, 2008

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    what should await me? I wonder as I reach the last step, will it mean that this dream will finally meet it's end, I can only hope but still ponder what it all ment

    Interesting take on this prompt. I'd like to see you work on this some more, maye clarify a little better just what it is you're talking about.
    I think I get it, but I might be wrong.
    I wish you the best in this contest,
    Love,
    jin


  • TimeAfterTime
    November 23, 2008

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    Wow

    very mysterious to me , I can't grip what your trying to fully put out , but I can definitely feel it. Great job. Another great write.