What is that running down my face
It feels like the end,
The end of my world,
The end…of us
What just fell on to my lips
It feels cold,
There is no more bliss...
What just fell on to my wrist
It makes my pulse stop
Draining all feeling from the tips
The tips of my fingers, from everything
No emotion lies within me
I sit here, Listening
Waiting
Breathing…
I sit here,
Crying
...
But if it were Yesterday,
or two days ago
A year a month, I know,
You would take that tear away
Let it fall unto your shoulder,
And say, everything is okay babe
Now It is time... my love,
My best friend,
I’m sorry,
Goodbye.
Remember, I will always love you
Until the end.
Author notes
The spaces have a very big significance, if you were wondering.
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Soulful
I could feel the expierence that the writer went through when writing this. Well done and passionate. THanks!
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Thank you very much =]
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very very beautifull writting i loved it keep writtin and i will keep reading -
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Thank you!!!
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very well writtten and emotional i liked
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Thanks!!!
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Beautiful flow, very sorrowful. Awesome write.
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Thank you so much=]
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Wow. Who'd have thought that something so simple could send chills up my spine. The spaces WERE indeed VERY effective. Well done.
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Thank you!!!
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This a good poem. Very sad yet beautiful. Good write!
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Thanks!
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A very lovely poem, sad but lovely. I won't deny it, there were almost some tears from me near the end. Nice job.
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Thanks=]. That means a lot to me, this is one of my first poems that I've written from my perspective with my own emotions, Thank you again=]
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Nice job great flow. I loved the space in time there. Very creative.
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thank you so much!
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this is so very beautiful, i did wonder about the space, but then i realised it was time passing, i think, anyway this is really great, best of luck in the contest
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Thanks, and you are very close, it isn't time passing by, it going back in time and each space in the big gap represents a month. Thanks again for your wonderful comment=]
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