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broken strings, only means no more tears

 

 

 

 

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a man twines his existence around the fluttering pulse of 

a woman                          her acceptance of flaws, his broken strings

and candle smoke rising to the tremors of sundays

sitting in church and questioning her faith 

         fanning the dark tendrils curling the descending of love

         bowing, dying...

 

it tears her, from dust to dust he blows away

and she cries, curls herself over his guitar until it imprints

the story of her life                 in her bowels

while her heart refuses to accept the creeping river

of her sorrow                        the curtains shielding, opening

revealing no weakness.

 

 

no tears shall depart from her gossamer eyes 

she sits in the rocking chair near the door, the window

gazing at life                        leaving and trapped between the seasons

passing, while she knits his gold hat

       waiting for his infidelity racked knuckles to pull it on his head.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Thanks Moqui, you're right. The roses need a new name. 

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  • Symphony
    February 19

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    Right, hmm, I found this very hard to read because of the tiny font, and then the unusual spacing that formatted the poem -

    Yet I am sure that it would have not been as affective if you had had left side paragraphs, and what not!

    Very moving write; such a sad tale, and you included some gorgeous imagery in here!

    Thanks for entering
  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    February 3
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    You should be on my favorites.

  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    January 31

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    OMG...this is beautiful and sad at the same time.

    All the best hon.

    MJ


  • Lizzie-Moffat
    November 24, 2008
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    awesome thing!

    luv it


  • Confusedboy gold member
    November 24, 2008

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    You offer much to comtemplate as the woman passes her time this weekend, doing for him, that appreciates little from her. Is she, his slave, he, her master? How dull life is with such existance.


  • Danny Beatty silver member
    November 23, 2008

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    this is outstanding ... it is brilliant ... the format like the frets of a guitar, the inner broken spirits fly ...

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