I rest my head on my hand as I begin to think,
What a buitiful lady to give me a wink.
As she passed on by,
Well I sit on my rock.
What a lovely way she has to walk.
Should call her up have a nice talk?
Oh what should I do with a nice lady like you..
Or will she find my lines cheesy,
And call me quit slezy,
Oh what must i do to get a lady like you?
Author notes
Poem written as if the statu wrote it statu: "The Thinker" by Rodin
This poem is verry cheesy in did lol
A contest entry
- "Why not tell us what you are thinking" - Winklings #146 by Lyndon.
1750 points, ended November 24, 2008, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Enter your GOLD & SILVER prewrites here!! by perfectsunset.
1600 points, ended March 24, 55 entries
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Nicely done,
though there are some spelling
errors throughout you might want
to fix. Other than that, this was
a great write!
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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A few major spelling errors, and the poem itself was a little over-simplistic for my taste. It's cute, but I don't know if it's good enough material for the contest. Even though it won silver, I don't think it was as deep or profound as the contest called for.
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If you truly dont think its good enough then take it out, iv got no problum with that your the contest owner not i. ^.^
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Cute!
Interesting poem! Good luck in the contest!
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Lol. thank you! i couldnt think of anything else i could do for the picture.
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