Since I roam I really have no home,
My family dosen't get to be with me,
For they are across the sea.
Home for me is far away,
Where my son and my wife play.
Well I am here and they are there,
All our hearts are filled with despair.
But where I am is home as well,
Even if it is like hell.
Author notes
Not so great but better then nothing...
A contest entry
- Home by CarolDesjarlais.
1500 points, ended November 25, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Iraq and Afganistan by SomeonesToySoldier.
625 points, ended February 8, 14 entries
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Comments
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Its pretty good and an emotion I know well . I missed quite a few holidays being away from my family when I was in that military. This poem certainly brings back memories of those days. thank you for entering this great write in my contest.
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thank you for entering this contest. Everyone is touched by the sense of homesickness our soldier's must feel.
I felt like I wanted more poetic devices used, rather than being told exactly. Free Verse allows this.
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your welcome
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Great work! well written and good rhymes through out this piece!
Good luck
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Super rhymes!
This is a very good poem! You are a very talented young person! Very good work, keep it up!
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Thank you! and i am not talknted
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A creative viewpoint... the soldier far from "home" who nonetheless can accept the duality of his situation... Very nice and best of luck.
Ken
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Your gonna beat me lol thank you!
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I am sorry to hear your heart is filled with dispair and that you are so far from your loved ones...Hopefully it will change soon for you...Take heart...Happy Thanksgiving to you and yours...
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I am not actually far from my loved ones, but i have a friend who is i simpley wrote the poem from his point of view, happy thanks giving and Thank you
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