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She Was Never There

Breathing coming harsh,
heart racing, burning cheeks
all within the comfort
of her twisted sheets.
No love being made here,
nothing joyous to be had.
All the linens soaked
by the tears of a girl, she's sad.

The phone isn't ringing,
he isnt going to call.
He will not even try
to right his wrong at all.
She has to hope to God
he really loves her, like he said.
But she's fretting and cold
in her lonley bed.

Heart is breaking fiercely,
no medicine can cure
the ache that dwells, that is building
in the depths of her.
Pain rages in waves
tumultuous as the sea,
all the while she's begging
"please, just love me."

The room is spinning now
and her tears won't cease their flowing.
She's drowning in her sorrow
all without him knowing.
Choaked gasps and whispers
begging God to please
let him know she loves him,
that's all that she needs.

When the sun graces the sky
on its morning rise,
the sight will not waken
her finally dried eyes.
She will lay there in peace,
finally able to sleep.
She will not wake again,
nor will she ever weep.

Although her heart stopped beating,
it carries the sane care.
His name embedded in her soul,
whispered softly as a prayer.
The tearstains on the sheets
are all remaining of her despair,
and time moves on without out her
as if she was never there.

Author notes

This is about a girl who more than literally drowns to death in her tears. "Drowning in pain" is a concept usually used as a metaphor, and I wanted to use the same concept in a more literal way. This is personal because my boyfriend and I seem to be going separate ways. Well, I guess he's actually my ex now. We dated for over three years, and we just can't seem to make it work, and this was something I wrote last night when I couldn't stop crying. So, it's got literally everything I feel. After writing it, I was able to go to sleep and stop crying. So, here is my broken heart.

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  • dustytiger
    November 23, 2008
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    wow, this is really powerful, i like how you took the idea of drowning in tears to the most literal level, i have felt that way before, it really hurts and you do think you're going to drown, you have captured your feelings so well, it's been a long time since i felt this but it brought it all back when i read this, great poem