my blood rises and boils through my skin it kills the people of the world and it kills me to know that i'm a demon.
i say i'm a special kind of demon a vour if i'm right i hate what i can do.
see vours devour the light around you and feed on your fear.
we prey on the weak and the suffering and when sorry night comes we'll kill you off and take over your body and live our lives through you.
i can't sleep knowing i'm murdering i feel bad for taking lives and i can't live knowing who i am.
i'm a vour a killer a murder i'm a demon.
so when i do come to realize this it'll be killing me and forever kiling me softly.
Author notes
i kinda got this idea from a book
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thank you for joining my contest, and im extremely sorry for having taken so long to judge it! Forgive me please.
You had a great write! It reminds me of rps that I participate in. Great idea, could very easily be turned into a book if wanted
great job!
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Nothing like a dark fantasy to play upon ones mind.
Well done, I would haowever, go back and read this with an editors eye...checking for mis-spelled words.
**Ktulu Blackwolfe** -
It's very interesting. Makes me think. I like it though. Thanks for sharing it in the group. ^-^
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this is very dark. i like that about it. the fantasy part made is really interesting.
good job.
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I am not really into the fantasy of it all.. but I think that you still did a good job. It didnt evoke tears though
Criss -
It would be good if you embraced who 'you' are, found the hidden beauty, made a revelation. Instead, you stuck to the idea that 'you' are a repulsive creature who does repulsive things, the tone is that 'you' are a joyful creature, a dancing whimsical unfeeling butterfly, but the words show a completely closed hatred of who or what you are. Like I said....it could have been way better.
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dark...talking about murder and demons...
and the title goes well with the poetic verses...
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wow
my jaw practically dropped when reading this. it is soo expressive and lacks expression at the same time.but it is ok thou. -
dude....
thats a little scary.......
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awesome
Aww wow this very deep and straight to the point it was awesome i enjoyed it
Great Write!
Love Mommy
~LadyLuff~
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