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A Blind Date

A blind date, I had to impress,
I’d meet him there at eight.
Went to my closet, chose a dress,
I think I gained some weight.
A sexy one, short and low cut,
I slipped it on, sucked in my gut.
A sexy one.
A sexy one.
I know he’ll be watching my butt.

I arrived on time and looked around,
I tried to look demure.
This classy bar was quite profound,
Expensive taste I’m sure.
And there he was; gave me a wink,
I walked on over, tickled pink.
And there he was.
And there he was.
He stood and said: “what do you think”?

That pickup line was quite bizarre,
This guy was pretty weird.
When we took our seats at the bar,
He said what I had feared.
“Your makeup’s smeared, you look a mess”.
“Where did you get that awful dress”?
Your makeup’s smeared.
Your makeup’s smeared.
This Cricketjeff has no finesse.

 

 

 

 

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Trijan Refrain
Dedicated to AP poet Cricketjeff

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  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    December 12, 2008

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    This made me laugh so hard, that naughty little cricketjeff. I wouldn't be dating him again if I were you. Thanks for the giggle. Best to you and congratulations on your trophy


  • cricketjeff gold member
    December 6, 2008

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    I am so honoured! Always wise to crawl to the judge, but then I suppose it can't be counted as a crawl with that final line!

    Your comic Trijan refrains will one day form a course of study for a degree!

    Great stuff and thanks for the entry

    Jeff


  • Dalaney gold member
    December 6, 2008

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    lol...omg!
    Darling, you are one of a kind
    Thank God, because I don't think
    the world could handle two of you
    I adore this.

    Love, Lane


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    December 4, 2008

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    Clever!!!

    I had a good laugh at this!!! This Trijan Refrain is so clever and you did an excellent job here!

    :Becks


  • Desire gold member
    November 27, 2008

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    OMG~

    I Love this and the last stanza- for some reason I was seeing images from the movie Airplane when the guy (asst) in the control tower was criticizing the woman's dress and making quips throughout the movie
    This is hilarious~ You are too much
    Creative and another one to boast about
    Yep! Yep!~
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes in the contest too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Swan song gold member
    November 27, 2008
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    LOL devine You do a wonderful Trijan Refrain


  • artis
    November 25, 2008

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    I thought crickets were supposed to be lucky...not bug you.

    perhaps you should have worn heavy fishnet nylon stockings and made that friction noise that occurs when stockings rub together, course if his name was Jiminy you would have been A-mer-acle to him, he was always a softy for a pretty girl. Oh, well, perhaps blind dates should be just that, a man with a cane and a friendly seeing eye dog. I would pay no mind to your butt, I am an eyes man first....no butts about it.~~~~Fondly, Artis


  • Pisces Pieces
    November 24, 2008
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    Full of lighthearted fun and is cute as heck!

    Made me smile!

    ♥


  • melphleg gold member
    November 24, 2008
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  • Mairi bheag gold member
    November 24, 2008
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    My bro is a complete gentleman!


  • Pure Thought silver member
    November 23, 2008
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    Wish I had a camera on him when he reads this. Too, too funny. I know he will ROFL.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 23, 2008

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    lol, i don't know what to say here but i know i like this my friend, i loved it, keep it flowing, my friend. keep it flowing


  • HaleyMary
    November 23, 2008
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    lol. Very amusing, Sis. You have more guts than me. I would never go on a blind date. I prefer meeting the guy before hand. That's just me.

    Great imagery and I think you captured the feeling of being nervous before a first date very well. I think most people are nervous whether it's a blind date or not. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.

  • laiqua aran
    November 23, 2008

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    I don't want to compete so I shall merely off a single "trijan stanza"

    That cricketjeff must be a fool
    To diss you in that way
    The way you look most men would droll
    And try to make you stay
    You look divine your dress just right
    I hope your mine for all tonight
    You look divine
    You look divine
    You really are my pure delight


  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 23, 2008

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    l.o.l.

    this is so amusing, though I'm not sure how he couldv'e focused on your makeup in such a tiny dress!! l.o.l.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    November 23, 2008

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    Jimminey Cricket!
    Under the spigot?
    Wore low cut dress-
    Just to impress?
    Shoulda brought your writes-
    Woulda made for better nights?
    Should have laughed out loud-
    Attracting an unruly crowd.
    With lower cut blouse-
    You'd taken down the house!



    Dad


  • StarEyes
    November 23, 2008

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    Sis,

    This is cute! What a fun read this one is! I really dont' know how you do all these forms and make them look so easy! Great job!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta

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