your body goes up
when it should come down
your feet barely touch
when they step on the ground
you save two steps by using one
and you throw out your arms
in a spirit of fun
that feeling you get
if you do it this way
its something inside
that is trying to say
you can fly you can try
don't hide it away
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Aww. I'm so used to reading sad and depressing poems... This is cute and such a nice, light relief. I like what you've done and the title is really apt.
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thank you for the awesome message within this write. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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good message
i like the message a lot! the first half seems less forced and more whimsical...all together though, an enjoyable read!!
amber
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this is very compelling from beginning to end.
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this poem shows sooo much positiveness in its message i really like it and its flow is perfect,
i have read some really depressing poety of late all cut cut cut, moam moan moan blah, and et this shows spirit and hope and i love that first stanza!!
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Short poem but full of hope.
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The beginning drew me into the poem quickly. This flows very well. It was a quick comfortable read.
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i like it. the rhyme flows nicely and it's easy to read.
thanks for entering and good luck!
kitch x
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