He held her warm hand
as he watched the snowflakes
softly fall outside the hospital window.
His heart felt bleak,
slowly shattering
like icicles cracking
under the weight
of too many days here.
Flooding her hand with his strength
he reminisced
upon the kaleidescope of colours
that had graced their spring
and summer respectively.
As their autumn colours faded
he felt an icy loss infiltrate,
as he was told of her pain
and impending death.
He squeezed her hand once again,
willing his love and life
pour into her
so that she would not yet
be taken from him.
Turning her head their eyes met
one last time
and the pain and love
mixed like a palette of emotion
flickered with all the memories
they held together.
And as she closed her eyes for the final time
the snowflakes fell softly outside the window.
Author notes
Prompt - Snow
I chose to write about Winter as the last part of life's cycle using the emotion that people face.
30 lines exactly (didn't count spaces though)
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A contest entry
- Hope(ful) Snowy Nights by SilentMoonlight.
1500 points, ended December 11, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Even through the sadness of your words there was that wonderful light of love glowing to brighten the darkness of loss. Truly beautiful in the most tender way.
Love Margaret
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100th Hood-Wink Celebrations...
It's a very sad and emotional poem, which touched me through the vulnerability revealed through your words...nicely conveyed through seasonal metaphors, ending in lifes last winter...
I was completely captured with the subject, and felt real emotion was expressed.
You have been ambushed by a Poetic Bandit
Love and smiles...~Lilac
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Thats ok I don't count spaces either.
This was a very moving write that reminded me of a story I just read; this couple was in a car accident and while the man didn't have much besides some cuts and bruised the woman had internal bleeding. It happened sometime in November I believe and was just the saddest story.
Very moving thanks so much for entering! -
100th Hoodwink~
Oh My~ this verse reminds me of the last moments with an Angel whom I considered like my other mother~ even though it did not snow for I live in Southern Cali- the tears did fall from her eyes even when she was unresponsive-little brain activity at the time~
How I did not want to let her hand go
The memories stain my Mind~ also Heart
with Love
Also You have been Hoodwinked by The Poetic Bandits
Sorry I am late~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes in the contest too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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