My tears are endless, watching you
So weak, so pale, but beautiful forever
Smiling through the darkest hours
For you know that there's always forever.
Hands entwined like we could never part
And that's the way that it will always be
Even when the life in your eyes disappears
You will forever and always be with me.
But the angel took your hands in his
And told you it was time to go
One last smile, one last breath
A snowflake lost in the falling snow.
I still hold you in my darkest hours
I still love you even though you're not here
I know you're beside me, protecting me
And I know that you'll always be near.
You're waiting for me, way up high
Smiling like you know we'll be together
At the end of time, through to the next
Souls entwined, now and forever.
Author notes
I know this may sound mean, but I hope this makes you sad September Faith 
Hope you feel better soon. 
A contest entry
- Breaking Hurting a lifeless heart by StarOfDreams23.
425 points, ended December 6, 2008, 12 entries
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awww so sad :-( lovely write though huni
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This did make me sad. The closest to making me cry. The story of death is always said.. but the way you wrote this tore my heart out.
"One last smile, one last breath
A snowflake lost in the falling snow."
Those lines are beautiful.
Bravo Poet,
Criss
p.s. the only thing that turns me off a little bit is to see how many other contests it's entered into before this one was even judged. -
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Thank you for the comment and gold!
The closest to making you cry, wow, that makes me feel special
Thanks again!
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wow. lots of emotion here. 7
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Wow this is emersed in deep thought. Well spoken from the soul, I think. Nicely done; thanks for entering my contest. Good luck.
Brian -
I love this! it almost made ME cry!!!!!!!!
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A beautifully sad peom that makes the reader sigh .Two souls entwined for ever.AHHHHH!!!! , Ros
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