It’s you and me against the world
Mother and daughter
Best, friends
You and I
I’m sorry for the times you see me cry
And the times you see the pain in my eyes
But I know you’ll always hold me close
And tell me it won’t always be like this
You make me laugh
When I come and ask you something
And all you’ll say is “how am I supposed to know!?”
Because you’re mum?
I know I can come and talk to you about lads
Although I’ll get that look which says
“They’re just boys”
I know you’ll listen to me
You make me giggle
When you complain about dad
And his dad ways
But I know you love him, and me
I’ll look after you when you’re old
But I’ll also laugh
Just like you do when I’m being ‘weird’
But nothing will change the fact that I love you.
Author notes
Written March 2007.
Option D - 3) Write about your relationship with either your mother or father.
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"you see the pain but in my eyes"
Is this a typo? Why would you have "but" in the middle of this line?
Nice depiction of a happy relationship with your mom. You - and she - are very lucky.
celtic queen -
Too Good for Gimmic & Tricks
Beautiful testiment of a daughter for her mother and, really, her dad, too.
This is very well written, so much so that I must advise you to never combine punctuation (i.e. !?) A well-written piece does not need gimmics and tricks to make a point about anything. It's already there in good writing. You have a winner!
Luv & hugs, BonnieQ
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Well done. I'm glad this is the relationship you have with your mother. Good luck!
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It is a lovely poem for your mother, I hope she really enjoyed this piece.. Good wor
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