Inky black lashes tickle her cheeks like crescent moons
The girl is broken
shattered
lost
ugly
She writes the forgotten poetry in her tattered notebook
"Hello my name's Brandy is anybody home?"
She could call her mom but it's long distance
Her stepfather is drunk again, pounding her head into the wall
"Stupid whore! Don't you ever listen?"
Crying, she curls up like a gumdrop fairy and says nothing
The girl is angry
exhausted
lonely
beaten
reckless
Her boyfriends are nothing but high school drop outs
They promise her lavish lives with mansions and corvettes
But their fantasies of being rock stars and actors expire
All the girl wants is to get away, but she's going nowhere fast
She just wants to get in a fast car and keep on driving
Anywhere but here, just somewhere in the city where it's pretty
A diamond-studded sky full of stars and beautiful promise
The girl is wishful
smiling
dreaming
hoping
That everything will work out.
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There is definitley a story here. I can see it all play out in my mind. I absolutely love the way you ended it with that last stanza. This is a great write! Keep up the great writing!!
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I like the story you are telling, though it is very sad you end it with a little hope that everything will be ok. I too like the descending words, they make the poem very ascetically pleasing. Beautifully done and full of emotion.
-Garrett
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Another good write ....
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Now this is magical...Not only can you write poetry, but i believe stories too. You are talented.
The descending words are a powerful as are you.
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wow
excellent!! this is a powerful piece of writing my friend, very sad toobut i see some light at the end which is never bad..unless it's a truck in the dead of night coming at ya at 90 miles an hour!! l.o.l.
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well done. I like the imagery.
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bravo
i love your format and your poem -
Thank you so much for reading and commenting
your words mean a lot to me.
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very great imagery tells the tale of a broken and lonley girl from a broken home and the end was beautiful with the hope you wrote of. Very great write! Keep up the great work! -Pammi
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Excellent
Very vivid words full of strength, hope, and passion evolving out of despair. The winning way.
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