Let's kick the shepherd off his wooden beam,
Demand to see and walk and think again,
Iconoclast, attack the foolish dream
Get on our knees and drink intoxicants
That come from water, wipe away the pain,
And roam the countryside like mendicants,
And haul our nets on gullibility,
Let's promise that the deserts shall have rain,
No need to have reliability
Mop thorny blood off sweaty rack of lamb,
And ride on ass, on palm leaves in disdain,
And guide the ewes in heat to heaven's ram.
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Written February 4th, 2004
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lol awesome dude and yes wierd... but I loved the poem
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Im not sure how I read this, part of said it was like "Spike Mulligan" rip off and part said it was satire. Part also said not something that true believers would want to read, but not being a true believer, I really dont know what little box to put this in. It was as someone upstairs pointed out, well crafted but as to content I hope you wont mind if I pass?
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It's so much fun, to just blast the words out in any order, and then stand back and see there is a message to it, deep, hidden, making the reader stand back also and try to figure it out, that makes moret than one message come out of it, for everyone thinks differently. thus you gave birth to a thought provoking poem, a real head scratcher.
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Uh...I must be tired as I can't really understand what's going on here...lol. But I will say that I did find the subject matter as well as the descriptions interesting and the entire piece had a well-crafted feel to it. I think I just need sleep before I can properly give this a real critque, lol. But for what it's worth I thought it was an entertaining if not completely coherent piece. Good job!
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i dont see it as funny. well, in a way i do. okay no, i think about it and it's funny, i can see little shepherd men pushing reluctant little ewes towards the ram with big...horns. and /him/ sitting there twidling his thumbs while he watches them mate.
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I like this. Full of all that worldly sweetness.
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Auto, you know I like you- here's my true opinion:
This is disrespectful, and since you can't yet see WHO you're being disrespectful to (even in satire) all I can tell you is to be careful. You're poking fun at something so big, so big.
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The Chi -Rho XP is one of the most popular Christian symbols of antiquity. Still seen in the worship and liturgy of the Catholic Church, the CHI RHO was formed of a combination of the two Greek letters chi X and rho P. They form a monogram for Jesus Christ's name. The X makes the "ch" sound and the P makes an "r" sound in the Greek alphabet.
The Christogram
This Christian symbol, called a Christogram, was used by the early church and was often found on official seals and coins after the Roman Empire became Christian. It is similar to the CHI RHO, formed of the Greek letters X and P and which are a monogram for the name of Christ. The Christogram was also adorned much early Christian art and illuminated manuscripts. Many Christograms were also embellished by the Greek letters Alpha and Omega attached to the arms of the cross. These letters were the first and last of the Greek alphabet and refers to Jesus words "I am the Alpha and the Omega"meaning that Jesus was the beginning and the end, encompassing all things.
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well first of all I thought - no sense - at least my poor intellect struggled to see it - then whall this is clever - then no not really just pretentious -
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While this is very well-written, I found myself praying that your intent was satirical regarding this world run amuck, in utter chaos of moral character repelled: about to die yet totally unaware. So, satirical was how I read this and, based on such, I would agree with your words: for they reveal the state of an "I Society." Well done, Poet. ~~BonnieQ
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excellent...as ever
Ah, Gio...are you having a go at me, my awesome friend? It is okay with me, you know. I never minded. If I am a fool then I will have suffered for it by living a life invested with magic and miracles...and in that final dawning moment of realization of my gullibility, I will scream to the heavens, "Oh, Gio! You were right!"...and die with a smile upon my lips. No need to fear I shall slay the fatted calf for you...I know you prefer your wanderings...and I am always simply happy to watch the slide show when you deign to share its beauty....there is ample room I think on the face of this tired old earth for us both - along with all the baggage of our differences. I respect you greatly....and think you are more spiritual in your fine moral conscience than many I know of who attend church and indulge in hallelujahs all night long. Thanks for this fun and interesting write....you always make me smile inside.
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Oh, Pilate, you are a wacky, bizarre fellow.
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Hm... I dunno, this one kinda pisses me off. (Nice job in that, by the way... it's not an easy thing to do). There is a lot more to believe in in Christianity than weak symbolism, my friend.
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Gio, you crack me up... what ever in the world is going on in that mind of yours?! I couldn't even begin to discipher your humor, and that's probably why I like you so much, because all the meanings of this humorous writing is extremely esoteric. I doubt anyone else will understand this--because I do, but then again I don't. 
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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my god, your poetry truly has changed... even the funny stuff is different! This is great! I like your rhyme sceme... its different, but I like it a lot! Great write!
Trin
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