“Homo Sapien Sapien Sapien”
I have looked long and hard, but your teeth really do seem to be made of enameled calcium
What happened to the daggers I am so used to?
How does your smile stay without blades to sharpen?
I have stared long and hard, but your eyes do seem to reflect what they call a soul
What happened to the bitter remorse they usually call upon?
How do you trap others in your gaze without a abyss to fill?
I have listened long and hard, but your words really do seem to be built around sincerity
What happened to the self serving syllables I’ve always heard?
How do you captivate without preconceived deception?
I have experimented long and hard, but your DNA really does seem to be human
What happened to the genes of hatred and greed?
How do you breathe, if not only for yourself?
I have thought long and hard, but I really so seem to love you
What happened to my self loathing species specific hatred?
How can I survive, without destroying you?
Author notes
I thought I might explain this a bit further.
This is based on the theory that we are no longer homo sapiens. In this theory, it states we are now homo sapien sapiens, which literally translates into "human wise wise". In the theory we are now a more advanced form, a subspecies. The logical progression of this is we will continue to evolve to become "smarter".
The idea behind this is that I have fallen in love with someone, but as a person who generally hates humanity (read some other poems from me, specifically "city of sky scrappers" or "humanity at its finest") I shouldnt be able to love a human. All the things I see in humanity are not in this person so they must be more evolved then me. I am a homo sapien sapien, she must be a tripple wise.
The last line refers to the fact that I am only human, and possess the qualities I despise so much in others, therefore I must destroy what I dont understand and that happens to be a person that is perfect for me because they are not like me and other humans.
-hope that helps a bit.
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I love your explanation.... especially putting quotations around "smarter".... because we really don't know that we are the smarter of past civilizations... Anyway thats off topic.... although there really isn't one....
I don't usually put in quotes of the poem in my comment but I was struck by the line: "How does your smile stay without blades to sharpen?"
Brilliant. Keep it up!
-Victoria
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The only thing I see that this needs are some periods at the end of the sentences because it just seems like it's going on without them.
Other then that you did good!
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Coolio. Evolution really isn't always about tools and personal survival; its also about the survival of the group, which means caring for rather than killing one another.
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COOl and weird write. It feels like an alien from another planet learned how to love.
Grammar : "A abyss" I think should be "an abyss".
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Not what I expected; I like. Except perhaps the final line about destroying this person, which seems odd to me. Still, 9/10.
A typo in L1 of last stanza? "...I really SO seem to love you" should be "do"? -
someone that used to be someone you thought hated you has changed and you have found yourself loving them..
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Very interesting spin here, I enjoyed this. Great job!
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