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destroying her progress.

it was just an innocent party
that she was about to go to.
or so she thought,she knew
there would be drinking, she
knew people would be smoking
she didn't know what would happen to her.

he told her she was beautiful
and to come sit upstairs with him
she sat on the bed, he sat next to her
her body trembled when he touched her
first he just touched her shoulder
then he slowly moved his hand lower,
she pleaded she didn't want to,
she's already had a bad experience
he tells her come on babe it'll be fun.

she tries to scream he covers her mouth
tells her just let him do what he wants
no fussing he says, she'll like it anyways
he starts to unbutton her pants,
she begs again, please don't do this
i won't let it happen she says.
yet in her mind she knows that
she is much weaker then he is.

he slaps her pushes her back down,
tells her to shut up, she does what he says
he gets her pants unbuttoned and off,
she squirms a bit, but is unable to talk
frozen silent, yet she can't stop
screaming on the inside.

he finishes up, tells her
"you better keep your mouth shut"
she just nods, knowing he's popular
she is not, it's his word over hers,
she loses already, he wins stole
my body for that moment, made
me hate myself for a lifetime.

she had finally broken free
let go of her past, and he
Mr. captain of the football team
destroys her progress, pushes her back
into her previous relationship.

now she looks in the mirror
she's disgusted automatically,
she grabs a blade that's her
way to feel pretty for a moment.

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  • SeptemberFaith
    January 9

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    I think there is a lot wrong with this story.. and I think it's probably society who teaches girls to feel this way. 1) if she already had a bad experience, why would she go to an empty room with a boy she was not friends with. 2) why would she not tell her parents, the police someone.. it wouldnt be her word against his.. It'd be a doctors word against his.. and usually doctors win.

    As for the cutting... this is the cowards way out. I know from experience you cant hide the pain behind something more painful.

    The peom was written well. I think you told your story well and the point was engraved in the readers mind.

    Criss


  • Xavier X
    November 23, 2008

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    You should have used the blade on him!
    Oh what a story you have told so vividly...it is a horror.