I smelled her leather just before her hand slid onto my thigh...
I breathed deeply, closing my eyes enjoying the warmth of her hand
"What took you so long?"
"Perfection takes time and is worth the wait"
"Shot of Tequila and a lime over here please."
Her hand travelled to my neck, kneading away the day
"I have been waiting all week, how much longer?"
Whispering, warm breath on my neck, "Don't rush this, there is only one first time."
I finish my pint, she her shot
"I am so nervous, I don't want to screw this up."
Her arms surround me, "Are you crazy, you are gonna be fabulous!"
Leaning in I inhale that primal leather and Taboo scent of her
"Where are we going?"
"The First Exit Inn, I think the name is hysterical!!!"
"OH MY GOD, are you serious!!!
"What? Come on, this isn't serious enough??"
"Is that her? Over there--by the lobby sign?"
"I think so, she seems to be looking too."
Down goes the window, "Hello, are you looking for two women?"
"OH MY GOD, now who is being hysterical?!!!"
"oh, HEY, are you meeting the counselor?"
"Yes, we are, you want to meet in the diner?"
"Ok, I'll see you in there."
"Jesus, ok, take a breath. How do I look? Do I look ok?"
"Hi, were you waiting long? Did you have a good trip?"
"I'm a little tired, but excited too, would you like to go to my room?"
"Do you want anything to eat, or order room service?"
"No, no, I'm fine and I don't want to be disturbed upstairs."
"Did you bring everything?"
"Yes, we brought everything you asked for."
"Awesome, this is going to be the best day of your life!"
All our eyes met, tears welling, up to the room we went.
As the door opened, we tiptoed in and the world fell away.
"oh my gooood" crying and holding each other.
"Are you sure, do you swear to do your best?"
"We swear."
Sound asleep, curly red ringlets,tiny hands clutching a blanket.
Anger fading, awed silence, profound realization
We carried her to the car in the basinet she was abandoned in.
A child, left, now found, never to be left again.
Author notes
IronMaiden1236
A contest entry
- 1/3 Round Contest by Never.Give.Up.
400 points, ended December 3, 2008, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Good
so simple. You have just shown me that poetry isn't always about using complex vocabulary and big concepts; you can capture something with simple dialogue, that's harder to achieve than anything I've done. Well done. I respect.

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beautiful
First impression is the sexual overtones but as usual you have the surprise ending. So profound!

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Like peeling an onion, story unfolds with changes of venue, successive details revealed leading to a surprise ending.


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MMMMM, can't wait to read the whole thing.






