Your hidden feelings
On this autumn day
Brought us here
so you could face away.
Author notes
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i think the last line should say fade not face. It just seems like it flows so much better. Idk, I just like it more that way lolz. Awesome work, short and sweet.
ing alone,
Mylee -
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there was a picture for this I just didn't have it up. Its in the notes. The girl is facing away from the boy. Hence face not fade, but I agree fade would have normally fit better.
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lovely flow and meaning... x
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