innocent offshoots leave us flustered
I stare into the clouds
and you shout into puddles
In a list
A contest entry
- In fifteen words by Lavender Butterfly.
525 points, ended November 23, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I seriously enjoyed this, congratulations on the gold accolades. we could anticipate so much from your write, even how to pick up feelings richocheted in environment by rich context of togetherness not so empty in periodic need of wider observation...
wanted to come back for that head and heart,
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landmarks of feelings
this does make one want to reenter the thought provoking bifurcation. there's a coalescence of each youth losing the moment to no fault really but being a child still, I could feel without a great chill. you assert the split that can cycle back to find some common element with your last two lines effectively as the railing wood in picture holding on to maybe some swamp drive that will come back to an agreed supervised point.
skillfully swirled and rippled. its imagery had base and stages of each other that made the setting so psychological as well physical.
very well done,
called Carolyn
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This is truly captivating and wonderfully creative... x
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Very nice write!
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Beautiful write, good luck
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i entered this contest? i honestly don't recall entering..
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i don't know sweetie, if you did enter i wish you the best
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