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Blood Stained Amaranth

I see you
Fallen Angel
I hear your cry

I'll save you
Fallen Angel
who fell from darkened sky

With tears
Stained in blood
For whatever we must face

With tears
Stained in blood
To live and learn another day

I see you
Fallen Angel
I know your pain

I'll save you
Fallen Angel
To help without gain

With tears
Stained in blood
To accompany your fall from grace

Dry these tears
Blood Stained Amaranth
And return to your forgotten place

Author notes

Option #2 : Amaranth -Nightwish

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  • Borntowriteforever
    May 31

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    your flow is very well, i can read through it with ease. i will make sure to direct any fallen angels i meet to you.


  • Cyanide Dreams
    February 15
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    Very nice. I liked the flow of this and I liked the format of the poem. It was very lyrical in a way too. I think you could expand more on this though and I also think that you could have used a variety or word choice. I liked the imagery though. It was fairly good. Thanks for entering. And good luck.

    Josh


  • penman gold member
    January 13
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    Wonderful

    Very well expressed. A terrific creation. Thank you for sharing.


  • xxvampyregirlxx
    November 30, 2008
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    wow this is sooo amazing i love it!


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 23, 2008

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    my friend this is a wonderful poem, the images are alive, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • forethought
    November 22, 2008

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    I'm going to break my no-commenting-until-after-judging rule to quickly mention that it is actually "Amaranth", not "Aramanth".

    It's just a small spelling error, but it is quite important to the competition.

    Best of luck (and I'll comment on the actual poem when the competition is over ^_^)

    ~forethought


  • Tik-Tok-Baby
    November 22, 2008

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    Aww..Sweetie. this is so sweet. I've always loved poems like these. the way it flows and the way you sound so sincere about saving them.
    It's very heartfelt. and I loved it.

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