Darkness can be defined by
the empty space between myself
and my heart –
he is the abandoned bridge
between my heart and eyes –
and the ghost water
licking glasses
that separate my eyes
from the real
world?
When I was little
and still slept
life would
wrap her arms
around me, her warm breath
in the cold winter
sitting in every crevice
of my spine,
becoming my nervous system.
Now, we are divorced
and every night darkness comes.
He lingers over me,
watching as close as a father
to his son;
I shiver.
His story times
are talks of
how life is like
an assembly line
and how we’ve got to
mass produce
happiness.
But all I’ve ever had
was this abandoned bridge,
these foggy glasses
and empty space
and a whole lot of
darkness.
Author notes
Inspired by the phrase "shuttled into oblivion" thanks to Melissa Gayle.
A contest entry
- shuttled into oblivion by Melissa Gayle.
1000 points, ended December 2, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Shoot.
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This is so interesting, I see my father in bits and pieces of this -
actually I feel like it can be related in so many different ways. You have the right amount of imagery and emotion - a delicate balance that never falters.
Really wonderfully done.
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your work is very inspiring. The way you word things and your use of metaphors! Wow! I don't even know!
An amatuer i am but i do know a fantastic piece when i read one. Youre definition of Darkness rilly hit home for me and that set it all throughout the whole piece.
Im definately inspired [= so i thank you
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wow....i really like this, this is so brillant, the descriptions of relation of father in son in your one stanza was genius, and the whole poem is intense, and makes you want to read and read
bravissimo
take care, Stephanie ♥
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wonderfully done with masterful skill, once again you have done an amazing job on this, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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I like this a lot.
Best of luck!
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