sun moon sun moon sun moon
in this sleeping life
celestial cycles are sheep-
how many must i count
before waking up?
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how many must i count
before waking up?
It is very rare that I come across a piece this short yet still delivers a blow to the innards. I liken it to being punched out by Tyson...wearing velvet gloves. lol
Indelible and incredible.
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I think as I am getting older, it seems as though there are common threads in each day that have me wondering what is real and was this a deja vu thing from days before... yes, that cyclical thing is getting at me too!
great food for thought here. i like these succinct pieces that have us wonder about ourselves after the reading is done. (I'm doing just that now)...
Kim
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yesssssssssss
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interesting
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cycles/cause and effect relationships, i think
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elaborate please
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that's it, that's where they all come from.
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unless you see everything as cause and effect, then yes.
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some, but not most
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this is kinda cool.
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i agree with matt, but ultimately, every significant thing in life comes from that place. so i think it is okay. i like it.
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this was a very good piece
especially at the ending, it gives the reader something to think about
sort of a cliffhanger effect, if you will
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you're holding ice and you don't wake up
increase the size but you don't wake up
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essentially, all of your poems come from the same place
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elaborate please
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i can't rmeember what i meant when i wrote that. if i ever do, i'll let you know
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likes the tittle and the topic and ze shortness
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