Though you're gone, I still can see
And feel your love, here next to me
You're inside my heart, it's every beat
I feel your warmth, I feel the heat
You're in my sleep, you're in my breath
I want you here, until my death
To love and cherish, hug and adore
To hold and caress, forever more
With no more tears, and no more pain
Only new joy, and life to gain
Author notes
Romance
Michael H. 2
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"I feel your warmth, I feel the heat"
this line was my favorite, well done! The simplistic style and rhyme work very well in this piece, thanks for entering.
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A sweet breath of beautiful, fresh air.
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wow because you rhymed you got more points in my mind ok thanks for putting all tings i asked for in your an
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A beautiful heartfelt write such beautiful words and emotions...
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aww this is so cute!!!! i love this poem. great expression of love without using big words to make it more complicated. it's very straight-forward and beautiful. i like it!!
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Wow. I like this poem because it describes how I have felt several times before and it is wonderfully written. Great job and thank you for entering my contest!
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Beautiful, I love it! You are going to the finalists list!
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Fine poem!
This short love poem almost brings tears to my eyes! Great imagery and rhythm! Perfect fit of title and last line! The use of the staccato two line stanzas is well done here! Your wording fits the subject so well. Very good rhymes, too! Good work, my friend!
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I LOVED IT!!
The rhyme was absolutly flawless and fit in SO well!
The flow was amazing and the language perfect.
I adored everything about it!!
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