Have you seen the weather report?
Cloudy
Dreary
Wet
Cold
My life.
I beg for help on the side of the road.
Tough love my parents called it.
That was five years ago
That was five years of my life gone
That was five years of pain
That was five years of tears.
That was five years of turmoil.
Liquor pours down my throat like gasoline in a car.
It is my only friend.
It listens to my tears.
It listens to my cries.
It listens.
All I need
I am society’s demons,
As I sleep on benches in the cold,
I am society’s demons,
As I stagger across parking lots.
I am society’s demon.
Nobody wants me near their businesses.
Nobody wants me sleeping on benches.
Nobody wants into look in my eyes and see how close they were to being me.
I had a shot of life and now I make the only other shot I can.
The gun goes off.
Please tell me what you think
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i read this 3 times. liking it more each time.
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this touches on reality in a big way, really like the line
Nobody wants to look in my eyes and see how close they were to being me" nobody likes to see the truth do they? great write.
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Yay. Finally it's been a long time since you've put anything new up.
I really like this, even though it makes me sad. But, you were so right about that one line "Nobody wants to look in my eyes and see how close they were to being me."
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dam......nice.
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honest
being outside of society isn't a bad thing. fortunately, we are not our demons, nor are we the labels that are attached to them. i identify very strongly this piece and i've been there. while it is impossible for others to see how easily and how powerfully one can be consumed by alienation and addiction... it is equally difficult for the victim of those circumstances to see that they are not their demons. keep writing about it - it helps to make sense of it.
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A dark piece, but the ending is not one I think will make the situation any better. Some times the hardest part is just moving onto the next day.
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A permanent solution to a temporary situation. Many of us have experienced undue hardship, some have spent time in the street, or living in a car. No matter who you are or how you got there the first part of the solution always starts from within. To cast all the blame about oneself without looking within is a bit of a cop-out. My brother's choice always was and remains hard drug use, it is everybody's fault but his that he still uses at the age of 52.
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tragic.
everyone has come so close to being there themselves. the emotions there can be so strong they drag us down far enough that we can't come back to the surface. you've expressed that here extremely well.
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Indeed, a rainy life!
The character was beaten by his own parents.
Yes, painful.
I'm sure it happens.
But, Why does the character ruin his own life? I mean, yeah, he had a bad start caused by other people -parents-. But i dont understand the point of drinking alcohol and not do anything to change his own life for the better. Maybe go faraway to somewhere no one knows him.. that's a start.
He shot himself. The easy way out he figured.
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powerful
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