As voices weave and wend to nature's call
I hear the wicked wishes wander thru
the woods, ingrained, it touches coldly, skin.
Its wake, now, leaves as raw my wand'ring heart.
The sounds do whistle, silent to others, known
to me as sinful songs of sad sirens.
Their pull can drag my soul in wanton ways.
A path of endings known, now, wanders lone.
As spirits, wind arises, lifts through dark
as flying words of empty wisdom's plight,
I walk and listen, what's been sadly missed,
is meaning to what the others have said.
Insane, I struggle, grasping at lost concepts
and moments felt in deafness'es deadened pain
The ears try, shut out voice of reasons right
that would have steered to road followed true.
A life of voices speak volumes to one
who ignored all in selfish plans of want.
What once was whispers roar in Zephyr's might
as pain that came from Furies shallow delight.
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Reminded me of a Robert Frost style of writing -
So wistful, and wise .. I enjoyed reading this.
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Words of Wisdom
This verse touched me in it's wisdom, for we all look back as we wander our paths and learn from this, sometimes wishing we had second chances,that maybe things might have been different.
"As spirits, wind arises, lifts through dark
as flying words of empty wisdom's plight,
I walk and listen, what's been sadly missed,
is meaning to what the others have said."
THEN YOU CLOSE WITH THE WISDOM SHINING THROUGH...ONCE AGAIN REMNDING OF LESSSONS LEARNED!
"A life of voices speak volumes to one
who ignored all in selfish plans of want.
What once was whispers roar in Zephyr's might
as pain that came from Furies shallow delight. "
Well Done
SM
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A really lovely read, held me from the first word to the last. Very well done
Sheila
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Beautiful! What I wrote of as voices within, you write as voices coming from outside, but still disturbing and fragmenting the mind of the wanderer... makes one wonder how we ever manage to lead sane lives, even part of the time!
Very intriguing and captivating.
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well done
a perfect picture painted in words, bravo -
Lovely use of alliteration in this piece and wonderfully visual imagery. I enjoyed this very much.
~Pamela 
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"I hear the wicked wishes wander thru" Love that line. This pen is so intense and mind blowing. You are a lot deeper than I ever thought you to be before I joined Journey's of the Mind. This one blew me away!
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Thank you Dragon Blue!
My poetry is evolving fast and I wish to thank you for recognizing that. I love that I finally impressed you.
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a most excellent write
wondrous word wrapping
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Thank you for your entry in my contest. I found this to be an interesting use of blank verse and your use of alliteration and imagery were very good.
All the best...Sue
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hello again.
"I hear the wishes, wicked, wander thru"
wonderful use of alliteration, makes a poetess smile to see someone use poetic devices as they should be used, tastefully. "Zephyr" has to be one of my favorite words,so much better then repeating wind, Again bravo dear poet to such a talented write, I adore your use of alliteration, also your ability to send your reader on a journey through fantasy and adventure. Lovely work M'dear.
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A strong and excellent write. I love the alliteration splashed through out. Beautifully done, good luck in the contest
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Thank you, milady
I always appreciate your reads.
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We follow our wants
but at what price,
we ingnore the eternal morning as we walk away from our divine essence.
such a pleasure
exceptional
always full of dept my friend
God bless you my friend...
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I'm happy you ran across this!
I have some fondness for this metered line verse.
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