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Risen From Dark Waters


Like a shell from the shore line,

I had drowned,

a slowly sinking beauty,

cascading to darkness,

under a murky surface.

 

Sunlight shined above,

but never penatrating my murky,

sorrows that I hid under,

because I wasn't ready for it,

and part of me didn't want it.

 

Slowly I became frustrated,

with my own confinement,

evantaully hitting the bottom of the ocean,

with nowhere left to run,

I cried for redemption and forgiveness.

 

The sunlight began to seep in through,

and I've risen to the surface,

ready to be happy.

 

Like a lilipad I float,

an ever rising fragile hope,

trying to light the world.

Author notes

Key words Prompt: seas
I used this as a metaphor to depression. If it's to depressing, feel free to remove it from the contest.

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  • x-sweet-sunshine-x
    November 30, 2008

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    Wow, great write! The word choice was awesome, and the imagery and metaphors were used very well.

    I especially like this stanza:

    "Like a shell from the shore line,
    I had drowned,
    a slowly sinking beauty,
    cascading to darkness,
    under a murky surface."

    Good luck and thanks for entering!

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    November 23, 2008

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    I like this a lot the last stanza is my favorite thanks for sharing good luck in the contest best wishes always be well