Wind tangles my hair,
Red lipstick sticking locks of hair to my full lips,
Rolling up the window I flip on the air,
Shivering I whisper don’t worry I’m almost there.
A contest entry
- almost there by going nowhere.
900 points, ended November 23, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Lovely for such a full poem. The only thing that bothers me is the lack of commas. I feel that if you put them in, they will feel more natural and allow pauses in the poem where the reader can pause and take a breath, instead of rushing through all at once.
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lighthearted and in just a few words, you have me picturing myself there... thank you
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Very nice. A good take on the prompt! simple and sweet. Best of luck in the contest!
Love, ocean.
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