Impetuous the young shall be
Cautious the way the older proceed
In between men of genius negate
All will be swept from the tides of fate
Holding on to our earthly bonds
Proves a challenge as the years roll on
No guarantee of a healthy state
All will be swept from the tides of fate
Looking back through space and time
No meager talents, all were sublime
Floating through life till it's too late
All will be swept from the tides of fate
Waking up some years later
My smile is dim, my belly greater
Why did fear rule this life of mine
All will be swept from the Tides Of Time
A contest entry
- Wasted time? by Talitha777.
1000 points, ended December 21, 2008, 26 entries
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I like it... yes with the passage of time things do change. Great write. Thanks for sharing this with us. I like it.
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Terrific write!
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Dark, isn't it!
You can really write meaningful, personal heartfelt poetry! This one is so filled with emotional imagery and pain! Perhaps you might try writing some poems with a bit lighter theme? Try writing some prompt poems, about say: a sunset or sunrise, a change in the weather, an old photo, something in or around your home, something about a pet or an animal -- get the idea? Try one or two, OK? You are very talented poet and show extreme promise, my friend!
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this is amazing!!!! i like how you repeated the last line until the end. i completely understand the tides of time. i only had so much left with my grandmother. i was always her favorite. when all of the cousins got together, i would be the one to comment kindly on her new furniture. then two years ago, she died two weeks before school started. she'll never get to see me in high school. and my friend might move back to Europe in two years. i know how to bide my time now. great job!
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