This quick session is meant for
the five seconds of Saturday in which
the car pulled up to the curb in my peripheral,
and I glanced over, excited,
anticipating.
He, the gray haired professional spectre
steps from the 760 li,
I feel paralyzed with fear,
he draws,
fires four beady little puffs lazily,
they burst the window - all of this with
the frame-rate
of an important scene,
the edges of my eyes crinkle,
an acetone blush
spreading.
I am dead
on the floor of the library
and the world
is all
thrumming
all frigid
alive
disinterested,
still chortling like the car's engine.
In my last few moments before the end I make a linear
path in my mind clear and bold and painful
through all my mistakes and
misgivings, regrets
set free, conversations murdered,
thrumming hearts stilled with
dead apathetic cheekbone
backdrops. The same themes
to the same story as the color and warmth fleeing
like scent from bread or other things
from other things,
here at the finish.
All of this
in a quiet town, five seconds of a dream two blocks
from an
Comments
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So interesting, and definitely dreamlike with enough realism to really add a shocking effect. I love the unusual portrayal of this visitor's arrival and the speaker's ensuing emotions. ... a truly intriguing write!!!
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You are definitely one of the best abstract writers I have ever come across. I love that abrupt, middle-of-a-sentence ending. Really interesting convention.


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Hmmm.... I like it. It's interesting, and intrigued me. I like the way you varied the lines, it made for quite a read. Votre travail est beau.



