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I'm The One Who Needs You

In the evening
When my body warms 
Just by being close to you
I feel I better go
Because my body wants you so

You are an angel
But I'm the one who prays
My soul's seen better days  and
I don't want to take your innocence away
Without you feeling
...all I'm feeling

Angel, you're so young and sweet
Can you feel my heat?
My body's reeling
You think it's love
But is this love you're really feeling?

Just looking at you and my spirit sings
I've been sad for so long
Something this good
Just can't be wrong

In my head I'm saying
What did I do?
What did I ever do to deserve my angel?
That's why I'm praying

Yeah you're my angel but I'm the one who's praying
Sounds hokey don't it, but it's true
What in my miserable life did I ever do
To win an angel?
I pray you feel it too

And I'm feeling
Yes I 'm feeling
So much love for you

And I'm feeling,
Yes I'm feeling
So much pure love for you
Pretty angel
I pray  you feel it too

Real love, not just lust
I've had my fill of that,
In this you've got to trust
I want real love and all that means
Building lives and building dreams
Because you're my angel, you're my one
And I'm the one who needs you

Yes you're my angel, you're my one
And I'm the one who needs you


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Angel and the One by Weezer

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  • RainDownOnMe
    March 16
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    wow that was amazing. i loved it.


  • Miss Splenda
    February 18

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    so sweet.

    this is so beautiful! if someone wrote me something like this, they'd have me at their feet. great rhyming, flow, emotion, everything. this makes me happy.


    • malkinpuss
      February 19
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      Miss Splenda

      Thanks so much for your awesome comment!!!!!


  • cbsbecm88
    November 27, 2008
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    Title-9 very good title with the whole angel concept

    Flow-8 the flow was kinda choppy some places...

    Rules-8.5 over 40 lines...

    Creativity-9 very creative and nice!

    Song-9 went well with the song!

    Total-43.5

    very nice poem! it got a little off in some places but the meaning was still there! good job and thank you!


  • FaerieNWonderland
    November 22, 2008

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    wow an amazing piece. oh my gosh! this literally brought tears to my eyes! i usually dont like it when ppl on here write lyrics but you wrote so much passion here. and the desperation for her to feel the same way...
    just so lovely!!
    great job!


    • malkinpuss
      November 22, 2008
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      FaerieDust9213

      Thank you for your words! They were amazing.


  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    November 22, 2008

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    this is a beautiful pen. seems to fit the song with perfection. i enjoyed reading your piece...

    becca


    • malkinpuss
      November 22, 2008
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      iwuzrite

      thanks! i luv that song so cool, glad u liked it!


  • Cant force beloved
    November 22, 2008
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    Beautifull thoughts and feelings penned here, loved reading this poem.

    Yes it was fine reading.

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