grave insinuations
upon the Hall of Marble
where his sleepers lie
on chilling whispers
& memories : cry
tears of steel
and iron
both bitter
as those eyes
where all that
struggling
scribbles
grave insinuations
upon the Hall of Marble
where his sleepers lie
on chilling whispers
& memories : cry
tears of steel
and iron
both bitter
as those eyes
where all that
struggling
Author notes
Prompt: Scribbles 30-40 Words
A contest entry
- Prompt by AliceinPoetryLand.
700 points, ended November 22, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Review Desired
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Congratulations on the Gold Marty
I prefer not to give critical reviews as I comment on poetry regarding how it makes me feel, not the technical ins and outs.
I always come away from your pages with something new inside my head...this time it's darker but nevertheless your words made me think and I like that.
Love Margaret
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unique and chilling . . congrats on the gold !!
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Just amazing! Very deep and tyhoughtful indeed. Thank you so much for your entry
Gaylene
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very powerful write
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I am unsure about the lack of punctuation but I understand it, plus i know you like i, have a method to your madness
lol
this is a fantastic write and great imagery depicted especially with the tears, best of luck hun
Tasha
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Short...
...yet to the point...I love the overflowing imagery depicted here in such well chosen words! Bravo & good luck in the contest
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