1one1
day that changed it all
my eyes o p e n e d
W I D E
showing me exactly what I had been
m/i/s/s/i/n/g
a day that my once BLACK
♥
turned
r
e
d
--my feelings for someone
reared their ugly head
and in this world
of TOTAL
hip-o-cris-y
obsessed with mat€riali$tic
vaŁu€$
it's a rare
*sparkling* gem
to find one akin to thee;
unscathed my pov-er-ty
unconcerned with the media$ influence,
living contentedly,
with the 1one1 they want,
the one they ♥
the one they feel =completes= them.
The milk to their tea.
Author notes
First formatted poem in a while.... anything need to be changed/formatted differently?
A contest entry
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Anything I should change?
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To find someone special, someone honest and someone who is worthy of love is indeed a one in a million opportunity that rarely comes to us and therefore we should never let it go.
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i love the visual!!! it brings the piece to life. i only wish there was just a little more elaboration on the subject, probably because i want to see and hear more.
"materialistic values" -- excellent
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ooo!! I like your style!! Especially your wide and red. I like the way you wrote it Keep writing ya!! Cheers!!
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Hmmm, I feel like the format is a bit overdone? Maybe that's just me. lol
I don't usually read poems like this so I can't tell you anything about the form and such. As of the meaning, I really felt the emotions and the imagery there was just fantastic because it was unique, didn't go ranting all that's been already said.
Thanks for sharing!
~Noor
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my feelings for someone
reared their ugly head
I really loved this. It explored so much while staying on task and not becoming a rant, which is my weakness lol.
The last line summed it up wonderfully also
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Yeah I have to agree with Bill, the last line is really great, and makes sure the poem leaves an imprint on your mind
And another thing we agree on the format the poem is layed out in is also great, makes the poem stand-out
"and in this world
of TOTAL
hip-o-cris-y"
Soooo true, loved this poem
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what is DP ? LOL
a great poem i LOVED the format, it was great to see, id love to be able to do that, i liked the meaning behind the poem to
a great write
i loved the last line
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