This
soft blue
marble turns
day after day
with people moving
in hustle and bustle
towards all their countless dreams.
The lost dreams scintellate like stars
falling from upper deep of the sky.
This wonderful world keeps on spinning.
In a list
A contest entry
- Poetic Form: Etheree - Prompt - Earth by Little Eagle.
600 points, ended December 27, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Thank you for your entry
It is amazing to think as we move around on this Earth she is moving around the Sun and spinning all the time. LIke a universal dance. lol
Nicely done on the form, though your last line was one syllable short. Good flow and structure.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy -
Oh, i love this piece..."this soft blue marble turns day after day as people hustle and bustle towards their countless dreams." Great work and i love the ending!
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Great form and content in this etheree, Jeff! People moving towards their countless dreams..... Can relate well. Good luck in the contest!
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an interesting poem that just makes a person think, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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