You whisper my name
with such soft and caring
yet condescending tones.
I run into your arms
like a child of desperation
longing to escape the cold.
We lay here together
and we're promising forever
yet so deep inside we feel alone.
You look into my eyes
and you see a hint of sorrow
so you start to pull me closer.
I get lost within your eyes
my heart becomes so vandalized
I try my hardest to deny the rising tide.
You cry out in desperation
longing for my touch
you want to be loved and you want me to set you free.
I act as though I'm in control
I act as if I don't need you
but you see through this clear thin veil.
So I cry out in desperation
longing for your touch
I want to be loved and I want you to set me free.
We would start to fall apart
then our ties would fade away
and we would be alone again.
I can't take the lonliness
so I swallow this bitter bliss
and I hold you for another embrace.
Hanging by the threads of life
we're alone for one last time
sing to me such melody.
A lullaby of love and loss
you sing to me as you dissolve
I lie awake in solitude.
A contest entry
- LOVE ME NOT by Whispering Wind.
700 points, ended December 6, 2008, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Share with me your interpretations.
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WOW
just beautiful and softly flows like a heart breaking love song...thank you kindly for sharing and for entering
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Well firstly I agree with Pisces Pieces, it is heartbreaking and longing... but to feel such love, even with a look in ones eyes, even if that took place inside a dream... it tells you something about yourself. For some that wonderful four letter word can exsist within their life, and it IS there to be wanted and to be longed for. I think I'm babbling now, so I'll stop. Great Write Brandon!
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A dream, only to wake alone.
WhenI read this there seems to be a softness about it even though it is heartbreaking and longing (to me).
Beautifully written and good luck in your contest.
♥
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Yeah, that seems to be what I was after.
Have you ever had a time when you just sat down to right, and the poem virtually wrote itself. I think this is something that everyone can relate to.
I was listening to a new album I got by a techno/slightly rock band called Innerpartysystem, and a lot of the lyrics are based around this concept.
I woke up this morning to put the album on, and I saw the contest right on the front page. I actually came across it by accident believe it or not.
A little while ago, I read this poem and then I swallowed pretty hard and thought, "wow." Sometimes my own talent and the things that lie within my thoughts scare me.
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OOOOOO Nice. I much like. That was sad and it made me remember things. And still my buzz is not affected! Yeah! Good luck in the contest bitch.
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I've been listening to the innerpartysystem album for the last couple days, and I felt inspired to base a poem around the concepts.
I saw the prompt on the page, I was listening to the songs Structure, and This Empty Love and it created the perfect scenario to write a piece like this.
The great thing about my new and clearer state of mind is that I can almost virtually put myself in any emotional arena. Love, hate, loss, political, anguish, sorrow, so on. Thanks for reading bitch.
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