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Let.Go

It's been a year - plus two months

& your still pulling me .down.

it was you who said "Its.Over.Babe"

and I let go, after a while.

& then when you find out I'm dating,

your friend, twelve months later.

You.Put.Him.Down.

You-Pull-Me-Up

& wont leave us ~alone~

& I'm a patient kind of girl

[no.point.in.holding.grudges].

But after all the things you've done,

I'm willing to make an e-x-c-e-p-t-i-o-n;;

I know at one point I loved you--

can't believe I __fell__ so deep.
& now you wont LET.GO.OF.ME

because it's another man I see.

Let.Me.Move.On.

itwasyouwhowanteditover.

& I got to thank you for that,

because I could never again

h a v e  y o u  a s  m y  l o v e r.

Let.go.

Let.live

Let.love move on

& maybe, realise.

Sorry    -    can come too late

Forever    -    like ours was fake

Love    -     for us wont work again

Maybe    -    wont come around today.

& I know that this times no different,

you'll try and sh.atter us c.ompletely.
I wish I knew what to do -

[I wish that the sex was awful,

then maybe I could break away;

promise me nothing, it's over

I wont go through that again].

 

xx

Author notes

He's a bit messed up & I know that I'm not much different. haven't done DP in a while, so decided to.

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Comments

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  • Kathraina silver member
    March 16
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    Very strong piece with a lot of emotion.
    Great job!


  • DirtyLittlePrincess
    December 22, 2008

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    I really liked this.
    The way you used DP was really really well done.
    Well done and good luck.
    Thank you for the great write.


  • hawkeslake gold member
    December 19, 2008

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    I'm very new to DP but I enjoy looking at new forms and new ideas. This poem is really well done, with a great capture of an experience that I'm sure many of us have shared. I think the punctuation usage actually does enhance the thoughts, a bit like a good picture or background would do.


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    December 19, 2008
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    & I always found it HARD to understand
    why you broke me apart and took my hand.
    Teased me, refused me, I loved you, OK?
    I lived my life to bless this sacred day.


  • new born
    November 23, 2008

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    This is really good! I love how you used the DP format & the wording was excellent. Also, nice background. All together very good!


  • Lady Australis silver member
    November 22, 2008
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    im sorry he came back to haunt you but im glad you know he isnt worth you knoe
    love ya


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 22, 2008

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    i don't know what to say, but i think you did a great job on this, thank you for sharing it, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • EvenStarsBreak--x
    November 22, 2008

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    Hmmm what can I say? I l.o.v.e.d everything about it.
    The emotions were amazing
    It was truly [[stunning]]
    I would keep it exactly the way it is. =]
    Thank you for sharing, you are I/N/C/R/E/D/I/B/L/Y talented. ^.^
    Keep up the excellent work.

    x-Pretty-Odd-x <3

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