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wishing hole

Another outline
        unrealistic feeble
                    hoping, thoughts the density and
mood      of tar
          swishing the tea
cup
        bottom my
fortune
                    may be read but be well versed in

        fractures
                        and  have a heel like
          brimstone,

      dance for me,
                  dance so
I don't have to
    think.

      I make the same plans

    to love the dead corpses
and              respirate    the uncertain

                      draw the curtain -
    girl,
                        my allegories are neither shocking
          or lenient,
                                or consequential; nothing more than gas

  in any way,            my teeth
                  are clenched and  watery,
      my eyes distant

and oily

            and here.

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  • Cant force beloved
    November 22, 2008

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    From the wrods I can pick out I'd say you had excellent thoughts but I'm unable to see what you were putting out,

    I don't think I've ever seen a styl like this before.