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When I Look To The Skies

When I look to the skies,
I sense that you are here with me.
The power of your denial,
Makes everything so much more real,
But with all my heart's wants and desires
I place my trust in a slip of life,
A breath with will not breathe,
No time,
No time,
No memory...

And so my life goes on.

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  • BehindTheShadow
    November 23, 2008
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    Yes, life goes on if we like it or not. This write makes one think. Great job!


  • Bean Sidhe silver member
    November 22, 2008

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    There is quite a bit of lovely imagery here but I will agree that my favorite line by far is:

    "I place my trust in a slip of life,"

    What an intriguing idea. Very nicely done!


  • protagonist
    November 22, 2008
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    perfect

    philisophical and outside the box... been there.


  • Cant force beloved
    November 22, 2008

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    When I look to the skies,
    I sense that you are here with me.
    The power of your denial,
    Makes everything so much more real,
    But with all my heart's wants and desires
    I place my trust in a slip of life....

    And so my life goes on.

    -Very nice reading

    I truly loved reading 'I place my trust in a slip of denial'