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purity in consciousness---

foot
first one
on each day
on the mother earth
play  surely  vital role.

Mother earth well known for patience
and preservation of utmost purity in consciousness
Hail the whole world  for eulogizing the creator
for his qualitative objects duly  formed with living beings
Away and afar  we can't ignore his capable  and caliber

A contest entry

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  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    December 20, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry

    Well you at least stuck to the prompt. Unfortunately you totally blew the syllable count of the form. Thank you for attempting it though.

    I encourage ou to keep writing to read and comment.

    God Bless
    Tammy