And she can't control her desire
to trace those curves of wisdom,
for the beauty held within the eyes
are all the stimulus she needs.
Oh and his hands have a will
unbridled by her senuous smile,
as they dive into an ocean
of dreams that need fulfilling.
Author notes
prompt: impulse
they teach children
to fight their impulses
by gaining structure
and
all I could say was
what’s so wrong with
impulse?
50 words or less
In a list
A contest entry
- impulse; everyone needs it by written-in-ink.
700 points, ended November 27, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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ah who wants to control desire lol just let it free to be smiling in the name of love and life, a good poem.
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very very nice
i love the last stanza the best
i think that it
idk
just amazing
thank you so much for sharing and i wish you luck
much of it
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thank you -
You and me too. What's wrong with impulse? And, all the spontaneous loving that makes all our fondest memories. It would be so dull if we added structure to that.
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100th Hood-Wink!
Wow, this is a very sensual write - I really like the curves of wisdom (makes me think of the learning curve
) ... and the separation of the his and her stanzas is brilliant for the effect that it gives of two separate bodies melding 
... I really like the take on the prompt - I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
Keep writing
Polly
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i like this one alot =) i would applaud but i am afriad its not letting me
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I dont think any of us get enough chances to act on impulse. Your words made me smile.
Juls
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100th Hoodwink! again :P
This is grand hun, you have that way of making me sit and ponder just where your thoughts come from. I am always left mesmorized by your talent and I am so very glad you have been chosen to be hoodwinked! Love to you sis
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