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Infinity

Sky so high, clouds trickle by.

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  • chills
    November 24, 2008

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    I am on my back

    in a cornfield reading this. Might say wish you were here but that would be far too cheeky and I get into more than enough trouble already! Lovely x chills


  • Sunkissed xo
    November 22, 2008
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    Nice use of rhyme! It really adds to this serene write. Great imagery and expression, I almost feel as if I'm there, lying down on the grass and watching the clouds fly past
    Well done on a wonderful write. Thanks so much for entering the contest!
    - Sweet Blue Eyes <3


  • MargaretG silver member
    November 22, 2008

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    Trying to think of another verb than trickle, but generally I like the idea. Amble? Cirrus clouds seem not to move much on a fine day. I like the rhyme!