I am not your ancestor
for the atrocities you commit
Not for the caste equations you bank upon
Not for the religious fanaticism you rage ahead
and finally not for waging wars cruelly
on innocent humans and ignorant nations
But ,for the personal and kindly traits
every body eulogizes you uninterruptedly
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20-100 words -59th Contest/Quickie/No PIF/ by Spiritualangel
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- 20-100 words -59th Contest/Quickie/No PIF/ by Spiritualangel by spiritualangel.
650 points, ended December 23, 2008, 17 entries
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Not for the caste equations you bank upon
Not for the religious fanaticism you rage ahead
and finally not for waging wars cruelly
on innocent humans and ignorant nations
Well expressed. Best of luck. -
Perhaps...
...I'm a bit stupid, but some points you make have me a little baffled :- for instance "not for the caste equations you bank upon" - what's THAT supposed to mean? Surely the caste system (particularly in India) creates a huge INeqality, and what on earth do you MEAN by "bank upon"?
Also "you rage ahead" - I don't understand!
The last line also has me baffled!
The 1st 2 lines would suggest it's the chimp who's talking/thinking, but if that's the case, it's not true everyone praises the human race for its kindliness ; nor do I see that it's relevant.
Furthermore, just to be pedantic, after the first "not" in your first line, the following "nots" would be grammatically better (IMO) written as "nors"!
Explain please.
Kind regards,
Robin Confused.com
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